My branches sway, creaking with age.
Rooted, watching brothers fall
and rise anew.
A solemn figure sits below,
waiting, shrouded in sorrow;
ancient regrets lay buried
in his lonesome frown.
My rough bark; smoothed
from gentle wear.
His rickety back untroubled;
fitting, as he silently rests,
with coltish squirrels, dancing
carelessly about his feet.
I crane towards the sun, stretching
my twigs like knotted wooden fingers.
Alike we linger, forevermore.
Knowing only each other, kinsmen;
waiting beneath the twilight.
Secrets held between us,
from distant past.
My planter and carer,
cloaked, beneath flowing robes,
I shall protect; until
my oak trunk crumbles.
To gradually rot; feeding
brothers unravelling roots.














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and grow anew in cycle." is awkward.
Other than that it's freaking great. Very nice work.
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Here is my edit:
My branches sway, creaking with age.
Rooted, watching brothers fall
and rise anew.
The old man sits below,
waiting, shrouded in sorrow;
ancient regrets lay buried
in his lonesome frown.
My rough bark; smoothed
from his gentle wear.
His rickety back untroubled;
fitting, as he rests companionless,
other than coltish squirrels, dancing
carelessly about his feet.
I crane towards the sun, watching
another day glide by; unnoticed.
Alike we linger, forevermore.
Knowing only each other, kinsmen;
waiting beneath the twilight.
Secrets held between us,
from distant past.
Now about the poem . . .
The poem is quite interesting, and it tells an interesting story. It has a melancholic feel to it; I interpreted it as a tale of an ancient tree watching its companion age and fade away.
What makes this so sad is the truth that the tree will see many more humans die in its lifetime.
Lovely.
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